爥, a poem.

8 thoughts on “爥, a poem.”

  1. Really like this! Thanks, Forrest. I don’t think we should let ourselves hide in the face of the losses that climate change will bring; perhaps that can help make our communities more resilient. Somehow this poem reminds me of that.

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    1. I think that it’s a valid thought, but not one I dwell on. It’s one of the reasons I travel: to remind myself that certainty can limit our ability to think and act clearly.

      Many people think of that question in binary terms, but you I try to spend more thought on the how than the whether.

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  2. Excellent work. Thanks for sending— and for writing—it. I like the vivid but ambiguous images, e.g, “the door at its base ajar,” that suggest anxiety rather than state it directly. I mean, for example, in contrast with an equally vivid image but directly descriptive line from a poem I read recently; it read, “the wind is wild with leaves. . . ”
    I’m also interested in your comment about the [zhu] character—that you “liked the look of it.” I like it, too, maybe because of the contrast of the openness of the left side contrasted with the density of the right, and maybe the resemblance of the left side to a human figure. Quite a difference from Western alphabet where one word can look pretty much like another, [cold] and [clad] for example.
    One further comment has to do with your title. [Anxiety], I think is too direct. It tells your reader what to feel. Better, I think to use a more metaphoric term, to let the reader puzzle it out and find the anxiety for [him]self. Sorry, I can’t suggest a better term.
    I also liked the picture of your notebook. You may remember how much weight I put on the process by which things get done.
    Make more poems and send them on!

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    1. Thanks. For me it’s more that the character contains several others that I already find appealing, and arranged as you said in an attractive way- huo/fire (left) yu/rain (2nd from top right) and then it sort of hints at for me the character 包/bao/package and 虫/chong/insect

      Anxiety was supposed to be more of a clasdifier than a title. I’m planning to write further short pieces on the subject. Maybe a prose piece as the first would have ironed out the awkwardness of having it first, or maybe a should have chosen another word as you say

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